eportfolio - Camp Writing

Motivation:

Camp Experiences

Learning Objectives:

Level 3

• Show a developing understanding of how to shape texts for different purposes and audiences.
• Select, form, and communicate ideas on a range of topics.
• Use language features appropriately, showing a developing understanding of their effects.
• Organise texts, using a range of appropriate structures.

Level 4

• Show an increasing understanding of how to shape texts for different purposes and audiences.
• Select, develop, and communicate ideas on a range of topics.
• Use a range of language features appropriately, showing an increasing understanding of their effects.
• Organise texts. Using a range of appropriate structures.

Learning goals:

• To hook the reader in with an interesting beginning
• A variety of sentence starters
• A variety of sentence lengths
• Edit and rework
• Effective peer checking and feedback

As I suddenly start flying upwards like a jet taking off I wonder if I made the right decision to go to level 3? Faintly I see the runners put the rope on the post suspending me 13 meters above the ground. As I am held at this height my knuckles start pushing harder and harder into my neck as my arms weaken and give way.

I prepare for the drop and then fall for what seemed like a minute but in reality was only 2 seconds as my stomach dropped faster than I did. After starting to swing rather than free fall it began to feel more fun and I wanted it to keep going.

Once the swing had become very small I had to stop and get off so that someone else can go while the others pull the rope. Because I was shaking like mad I didn't help much for the next 3 people.

In my opinion I think it's good if you get two turns but I don't think it is worth it for one.

I think that this was a good piece of writing and It flows quite well  and that I have done my goal of linking paragraphs well in this but I think I could have made it better by editing it more but I couldn't find any points that I thought needed editing.