I am a student. This is a place where I will share my learning with you. Please note....some work won't be edited - just my first drafts, so there may be some surface errors. I would love your feedback, comments, thoughts and ideas.
Hayden, this is a great piece of writing. I really enjoyed reading it. You have some great similes which conveys a strong idea to your audience. It can be tricky to show rather than tell. I find that thinking about your senses helps to show. Give it a go!
Hayden, this is a great piece of writing. I really enjoyed reading it. You have some great similes which conveys a strong idea to your audience. It can be tricky to show rather than tell. I find that thinking about your senses helps to show. Give it a go!
ReplyDeleteThank you Miss Harsent.
ReplyDeleteI think I used a good amount of similes in my writing.
And I will try to include more senses next time.